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7/3/09 Tree – 3

By Flak | Comments: 4

For all my Gurren-Lagann loving buddies.

There’s a ceiling over our heads, because we live underground. That’s what the elders say. And there’s a great tree–a mighty plant–with roots thick and plentiful, and those roots are lodged in the ground, in our ceiling. There’s a mighty lumberjack up there, they say, and sometimes he takes an axe the size of fifteen men and he strikes the tree with it. When he does, the earth trembles, and rocks fall from the sky. Big bro says, he says, “I’ll go up there someday and beat the shit out of that lumberjack!” But big bro. When the lumberjack falls, his body will come crashing through the ceiling, and we’ll be crushed.

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  1. If I’d known the slavers were coming, I woulda let him do it.
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    “obliterated” is out of style with the rest. “we’ll all die” may not be very poetical, but neither is the narrator

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    Karamazov — 7/3/09 @ 2:39 am | #Link |

  2. lol @ slavers

    Good point on obliterated. I’ll think about the diction there for a bit, then edit. Thanks!

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    Flak — 7/3/09 @ 7:22 am | #Link |

  3. I think “crushed” works nicely.

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    Flak — 7/3/09 @ 4:05 pm | #Link |

  4. much better

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    Karamazov — 7/3/09 @ 9:03 pm | #Link |

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