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3/9/08 He Always Hated You - HC Chapter 28

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Also, what, you thought eight months would kill my magnum opus?

Speaking of dreadful revelations, this Part 3: Julien spiel seems to be full of them. Picking up after last chapter’s discovery of a Ji’Lopan bent upon the destruction of Gem, we get a Mana chapter… with uh, dreadful revelations. And no, of course nobody’s life is in danger!

This chapter goes a bit more in-depth with the Thief’s hatred of magic and gives more hints at the political things going on behind The Purge. It also gives some hints at other things, but I won’t spoil.

Here’s the link to .rtf downloads for you monitor haters: Hunter Chronicles downloads

Enjoy, and, as always, please comment.

My Notes (major spoilers for THIS CHAPTER, click to view)

With this chapter, I condensed about four boring chapters from the old version and made them interesting. Instead of having:

Chapter X: Julien, Mana, and the Thief ride to Quake.
Chapter X+1: Julien, Mana, and the Thief sit on the edge of the lake, not sure how to get into the caverns.
Chapter X+2: Mana uses magic and runeedge to blast the three into the caverns. They search for the Crystal.
Chapter X+3: They encounter Kieku, Julien leaves wordlessly.

We have:

Chapter X: Julien, Mana, and the Thief ride to Quake with interesting discussions. Once there, Julien takes Mana’s Aqua Crystal, Kieku appears, they exchange some angry banter with Mana and the Thief, and ride away. Bam!

I think it’s better this way. But don’t take just my word for it… be your own judge.
As a special service, I have here uploaded unedited, uncut, unadulterated, four chapters of the last version of the Crystals of Mana. Please note that this version was corrupted when my hard drive broke back in 2005, hence large chunks of missing words.

Also note that continuity was less… continuous… in the previous version, and that things didn’t make sense, and that the order in which characters discovered things was lame. Anyway, without further ado, I present to you:

Four Chapters of CoM2004

And with this colorful show-and-tell item, I conclude any commentary. Let the text speak for itself.

By the way, 28 chapters, 242 pages, 97,342 words. We’ll break 100k with the next chapter. Way to rock hard :)

And finally, to reiterate a point I made eight months ago: an interlude (prologue for Part 3) will come in the future. I haven’t yet decided what to put… but, yeah, there will be one. Later.

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Part 1: Gem
 Part 2: Mist
 Part 3: Julien


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  1. I didn"t think the Thief had the intelligence to stay put. Maybe he"s just a coward.

    Karamazov — 9/28/08 @ 7:26 am | #Link | Reply

  2. He"s a bit of a coward, yes. You might remember how, in Chapter Thirteen, when the Joker and the Thief were going to be executed (our introduction to them), he whimpered and moaned and was generally frightened?

    But I said only a -bit- of a coward. He"s meant to be shrewd in some ways. Yes, his thinking faculties have some shortcomings (he hates things, after all), and he"s by no means the thinking head of the Joker/Thief ogre, but he"s got a certain smartness when it comes to confrontations. He rides with the Marauders, after all. He"s a raider, a thief, probably a killer. He can think on his feet. So yeah. He stayed put (there was also that he couldn"t talk) and didn"t get himself trying to attack Julien/Kieku.

    Also, keep in mind that he"s aware of Kieku"s strength and Julien"s runespear. He probably hasn"t seen the full extent of Kieku"s "chaosmagic" (if it can be called that) in the way Gem has, but he knows the man is incredibly powerful.

    P.S. You said you were going to read TOHĶ

    Flak — 9/28/08 @ 7:26 am | #Link | Reply

  3. I read both. Or at least, some of both.
    On unrelated topics, my forum account seems to have been replaced by "Black Rose". How will you survive without my semiannual nonsensical interjections?

    Karamazov — 9/28/08 @ 7:27 am | #Link | Reply

  4. Durrrrr, it has? I"ll check it out and try to fix that.

    Flak — 9/28/08 @ 7:28 am | #Link | Reply

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